Let's see who can tidy up, sort out - fix - the mistakes in this passage of writing. Once you think you have finished, send your fixed up(published) version of the passage to me by note.
The person that fixes up all the mistakes, will be the new Publisher.
(And if in the case that more than one person fixes it correctly, then another passage will be placed up)
Passage:
roxas... you tried moving your arms to shack him - hoping he'd wake up. Also hoping that he would not droll all over you. you were able to freely move your arm as you brushd his bangs out of his face. he was fast asleep.
Fighting all those Heartless single-handly and arguing with you earlyr that day must have worn him out a lot.
Your gaze returned to the ceiling, a blush spreaded across your checks. You were glad that everything was cool between the two of you. but...now that you realized that, it seems that you've never actually told Roxas that you...
Blushing, you looked around the small room. Carpet flew off - probably to retreve the othres. Sighin, you looked back at roxas again - feeling your heart beat increase. He was sleeping and you were alone, so there was no way he - or anyone - could hear you. Right.
Roxas, I... you swallowed, your voice growing more and more quiter, I love you...
His breathing stooped. Your eyes widened.
I love you too.
I've wanted to hear that from you for a long time. Roxas says, lifting his face to look at your shocket expresion. Aparently, Roxas was never asleep in the first place. He was just really tired and wantd to calm dwn after flew so fast on Carpet.
R-roxas...I-I didn't meen... you blushed, afraid that he was made at you for not telling him that for a long time. After all, didn't boyfriends and girlfriends say those things to each other all the time? Roxas did seem disappointed wen you didn't tell him that when you were rideing on Carpet. Also, his voice just now...it was hard to tell weather he was pleasd or not."...I men...I thought you were..."
"Thank you," he said softly as you stopped rambling. He was smiling at you, his eyes shining as he pulled him up - still hoving over you, "I'm glad you told me."
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TWILIGHT FOR LIFE
I CAN'T HELP BUT LOVE TWILIGHT
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